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Who are you girl waiting the bus?
Looking at the world through black-shadowed eyes
What are you really hoping, yearning for?
Something, someone to cure your open sores

You look just how I feel
Like we’ll never ever heal
Wish I could give you a hand
But no true hero is in despair

What’s your name girl waiting the bus?
Staring at the world with somber eyes
What are you hoping, yearning to come your way?
A chance, finally, to go far far away

I feel just how you look
Like an unread, unopened book
Running might seem just right
But problems never leave your side

What’s the matter girl waiting the bus?
You could open up and stop your unstoppable run
Courage, determination – Not our best friends
If we don’t do something our sorrow will never end

I know just how you feel
Trapped inside, without any will
With no answers from within
Maybe you and I will never win

I’ll tell you how we feel
Friends and love’s unreal
Shouting for some help
Without knowing how to yell
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This is a song that I finished writing almost entirely a couple of nights ago, but I actually started writing it 6 years ago when I was 15.
I was in the bus, coming back home from school. We pass by a bus stop and among a bunch of people there was this girl. She was the only one sitting. And the look on her face was of the utmost sadness. I only saw her for two seconds. I never knew her name or what was her problem, but that face told me a great deal.
I felt connected to her in some way, don't know why. Maybe because I was in that teenage phase when you're a bit depressed and the prospect of your future is becoming a little overwhelming; now that I come to think about it, I still feel like that ... Anyway, it inspired me to write this song. A song that I don't know if I should call it so 'cause I only have the lyrics, but I'm planning to learn how to play the guitar and maybe then I can really say this is a song, of course there'll still be a problem: my singing, which is awful.
Well, hope you like it :D
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i can sing it if you'd like me to. i love it :heart:

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frog princess of cydonîa.
Thank you LC :D

And thanks for the fave!
you're welcome ^^

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frog princess of cydonîa.
=) I really like it. The way you describe looking into a stranger like that is remarkable. I don't always like poems that don't rhyme, but I really like this one.

Abbie

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Revenge really isn't all that sweet. Sure, at first it's good, but the aftertaste is kind of bitter, not to mention it gets stuck between your teeth.
Gee thanks a lot :D

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Maybe you'll find a girl to sing it. Just be patient. All sweet guys find a mate.

This is very good. I like the idea of seeing a mysterious sad girl and wondering what's up with her.

Your English is almost perfect, way better than some of the American kids here, who make me wonder whether they speak English at all. One minor thing: It should read 'girl waiting for the the bus'.

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Thank you very much, Alice! :hug: Your liking this means a lot, considering your poetry aptitudes :D
And thanks for the correction, maybe if I get inspired I can re-write this ;)

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No need to re-write, just that one typo to correct. Do a fix and go off and write 'moar'.:)

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:? what's moar? ... I've looked it up in an English-Spanish Dictionary but it doesn't say :?

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